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**Article Review on Behavioral/Non-Substance Addictions or Process Addictions–Final Article**
**All Students:** Be sure to use a peer-reviewed article.
Look at the list under the "Assignments" tab for a list of some professional journals or ask one of the librarians to assist you in finding peer-reviewed sources.
Your article review should be written in minimal APA style (see item 2 of your syllabus on page 2) I don't require in-text citations for this but will need the article referenced in APA style at the end.
The review must contain at least:
1. a summary of each of the articles,
2. each articles strengths and weaknesses,
3. and a conclusion indicating what insights that you gained from both articles and their benefit to students studying this topic.
Undergraduate Students:
Article Review on Process Addiction – Students will review a professional article (no webpages* or magazine articles) on a process addition. A process addiction is also called a non-substance-related addiction or behavioral addiction and it includes a compulsion to repeatedly engage in an action until it causes serious negative consequences to the person's physical, mental, social, and/or financial well-being. One sign that a behavior has become addictive is if it persists despite these consequences. Examples include but are not limited to:
gambling, sex, shopping, internet, overeating, body modification (tattoos, piercings, etc), videogames, and others
*Note: internet sources that are based upon professional print sources are acceptable for the review. Non-professional and unverified websites are not acceptable. The paper must be at least a full page long (not including cover) and provide the reference for the article, double-spaced, New Times Roman 12-pt font, and APA format (see item #2 above). (All Objectives)
Journals (Your paper should come from peer reviewed Journals such as the ones below, these are only suggestions bur remember that magazines and other non-peer reviewed sources are not accepted.)
LIST OF SUBSTANCE ABUSE JOURNALS*
Addiction. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addictive Biology. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addiction Professional. Providence, RI: Manisses Communication Group.
Addictive Behavior. New York: Pergamon Press.
Addictive Disorders and Their Treatments. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Advances in Alcohol and Substance Abuse. New York: Haworth.
Alcohol. New York: Pergamon Press.
Alcohol and Alcoholism [Official Journal of Medical Council on Alcoholism]. London: Oxford University Press.
Alcohol Health & Research World. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcohol Research and Health. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcoholism: Clinical and Experimental Research [Official Journal of the Research Society on Alcoholism]. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Alcoholism Treatment Quarterly. New York: Haworth.
American Journal on Addiction [Official Journal of American Academy of Addiction Psychiatry]. New York: Brunner-Routledge.
American Journal of Drug and Alcohol Abuse. New York: Taylor & Francis. [refereed]
British Journal of Addiction. Oxford, England: Blackwell Publishing.
Contemporary Drug Problems. NY: Federal Legal Publications. [refereed]
Drug and Alcohol Dependence. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Drug and Alcohol Review. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Drugs, Education, Prevention, and Policy. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Journal of Addictions and Offender Counseling. Alexandria, VA: American Counseling Association. [refereed]
Journal of Addictive Diseases [Official Journal of American Society on Addiction Medicine]. New York: Haworth.
Journal of Alcohol and Drug Education. Lansing, MI: American Alcohol & Drug
Information Foundation. [refereed]
Journal of Chemical Dependency Treatment. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Child and Adolescent Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Drug Education. Amityville, NY: Baywood Publishing.
Journal of Drug Issues. Tallahassee, FL: School of Criminology and Criminal Justice.
Journal of Ethnicity and Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Prevention and Intervention in the Community. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Primary Prevention. New York: Plenum.
Journal of Psychoactive Drugs. San Francisco: Haight-Ashbury.
Journal of Studies on Alcohol. Picataway, NJ: Alcohol Research Documentation.
[refereed]
Journal of Substance Abuse. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Journal of Substance Abuse Treatment. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Nicotine and Tobacco Research [Official Journal of the Society for Research on Nicotine and Tobacco]. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Psychology of Addictive Behaviors. Washington, DC: American Psychological
Association.
Substance Abuse. New York: Plenum.
Substance Use and Misuse. New York: Dekker.
\* This is not a comprehensive list.
**## DraftwTutorComments11.docx**
Holmes 4
**First** **Draft** Comment by TWILSO60: I notice you type your last name alongside the page number in the top right. Unless your professor states otherwise, this isn’t necessary according to APA conventions. Instead, you’d just type the page number so that it stands alone.
Here’s a helpful resource you can use as a visual guide to APA (and what I use to review APA formatting for student papers!): https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_guide/documents/APA%207%20Student%20Sample%20Paper.pdf. All of my comments regarding APA formatting will be based on this resource. Comment by TWILSO60: This is fine since this is a first draft, but make sure to give this a more creative title later! Typically, your title will give the reader a good idea of your paper’s contents.
Delrion Holmes
Auburn University in Montgomery Comment by TWILSO60: Department of ___, Auburn University at Montgomery
ECED 6370 Comment by TWILSO60: ECED 6370: Full Course Title Comment by TWILSO60: Place your professor’s first and last name between these pieces of information.
“Dr. Firstname Lastname
06/19/2025 Comment by TWILSO60: 19 June 2025 Comment by TWILSO60: A lot of things are in the right place on your title page, but they need some slight edits to fully meet APA conventions.
**Behavioral Addictions and Psychological Distress in Turkish Psychology Students** Comment by TWILSO60: Is this the title of your paper (that’s what this would typically be, but I’m just clarifying)? If so, why not replace the “First Draft” on your title page with this, maybe followed by “An Article Review of ___”?
Gürbüzer and Gürcan-Yıldırım (2025) examined behavioral addictions and psychological distress in a sample of 329 psychology students (76.3% female) from Eastern Turkey. With the application of validated scales (Internet Addiction Test, Yale Food Addiction Scale, etc.) along with the SCL-90-R for psychological symptomatology, the study generated major findings: Comment by TWILSO60: Could we get the authors’ full names when you first introduce them? Comment by TWILSO60: I think you might use the literary present tense instead of past: typically when one writes about an article, they describe it as though it’s unfolding in the present. It’s sometimes awkward to do, but it’s the general practice. Comment by TWILSO60: I might want a little more information into the background of this study. Why was it conducted? What did they hope to discover?
Also, the point that most participants are female is interesting, but I don’t understand its significance quite yet. Because it’s highlighted, though, I feel like it must be significant, right? Clarify this for us, just a little.
I.
**Prevalence Rates**: Comment by TWILSO60: Is the professor okay with how this is broken down into a bulleted list? Most article reviews I’ve read in the Learning Center have been typed as traditional paragraphs.
Double check the expectations with your professor because they may expect paragraphs themselves, which would include a more involved process of writing than these bulleted lists.
· Food addiction was the most common type of addiction at 21%, then Internet addiction and compulsive buying (both 10.3%).
· Exercise and gambling latencies showed lesser figures of 5.5 and 3.3%, respectively, due to cultural/geographical considerations (e.g., religious prohibitions on gambling).
II.
**Demographic Predictors**:
· Gender differences were found with compulsive buying and food addiction higher in females, whilst males were higher in exercise and gambling addictions. Income, on the other hand, was only statistically significantly associated with compulsive buying.
· A link was found between BMI and food/exercise addictions, implying that there might be two-way interactions between weight and addictive behaviors.
III.
**Psychological Distress**:
· There was a general correlation between compulsive buying, internet addiction, and food addiction and all SCL-90-R symptoms (such as depression and anxiety).
· Exercise addiction was more strongly related to phobic anxiety and psychoticism.
· Regression analysis determined the following predictors:
i. Internet addiction: Depression, phobic anxiety, and paranoid ideation.
ii. Food addiction: Phobic anxiety.
iii. Compulsive buying: Paranoid ideation.
IV.
**Theoretical Implications**: Comment by TWILSO60: It’s somewhat hard to tell what’s your writing here and what’s simply you summarizing information from the study.
The results strengthened the self-medication theory, suggesting that students might employ these addictive behaviors to relieve distress (e.g., online activity relieves depression).
V.
**Limitations**:
There is no causality due to the cross-sectional study, and bias can exist because of self-reporting. The sample makeup limits generalizing (psychology students only).
**Conclusion**: The study gave insight into culturally specific interventions addressing psychological distress to reduce behavioral addictions in students. Comment by TWILSO60: Hi Delrion,
1.)I’ve noted a few formatting / grammar mistakes in your paper. These are mostly related to the APA formatting of your title page, which could use some edits.
2.)Your draft features a well-done References page—it’s one of the best I’ve reviewed as a tutor! I think you also present some interesting findings from the article you reviewed, which is an important part of the assignment as I understand it.
3.)As you’ll see in my comments, there are a few points of primary focus for revising this draft and developing it further. For instance, your Title Page almost meets APA conventions, but there are a few mistakes holding it back. Compare your Title Page to that of the sample paper available on Purdue OWL for clarity.
More concerning, though, is the formatting of your article review. Unless your professor has asked for it to be formatted as it is, I don’t think this should be typed in the form of bulleted lists. These lists are helpful when drafting a paper (and something I’ve made use of when drafting many of my own!), but they’re not usually wanted for submitted assignments because they take up a lot of space without the same depth of content as traditional paragraphs and sentences. Consider reformatting your lists so that they read as paragraphs; as you do, consider how to make your sentences cohesive, or make sure they flow well into each other.
Finally, consider what may be missing from your article review beyond traditional paragraphs: right now, your bulleted lists comprise the results or findings of the source, but it doesn’t quite go into its methods; likewise, you offer a summary of the source, but I believe most article reviews also review a source’s strengths/weaknesses as well as evaluate its overall argument and methodology. As I’m unfamiliar with this course assignment, I’m unsure what all it should include; however, it may be that there are key aspects of this article review that aren’t quite present (i.e., the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections). If you’re unsure what all you should include in your article review, please contact your professor for help and guidance.
4.)Of the changes I recommend and remind you of, I encourage you most to develop this assignment further so that it meets all expectations of an article review. As is, I’m concerned the assignment is incomplete. This may be fine for a draft, where not everything has to quite be in order, but you’ll want to make sure you fill the gaps of what may be missing. As you reformat your bulleted lists as paragraphs, you’ll naturally work toward completing the summary of your article; that’ll still leave the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections of your article review. For guidance, consider revisiting the LC, contacting your professor, or reading examples of article reviews.
**References**
Gürbüzer, N., & Gürcan-Yıldırım, D. (2025). Behavioral addictions and psychological distress: Insights from psychology students in Eastern Turkey.
_Humanities and Social Sciences Communications_,
_12_(1). https://doi.org/10.1057/s41599-025-04623-3 Comment by TWILSO60: This citation looks really nice. Just one small thing: does this source have page numbers? If so, you need to include them after the volume and issue numbers
“12(1), 431-44. http…”
**## DraftwTutorComments11.docx**
Holmes 4
**First** **Draft** Comment by TWILSO60: I notice you type your last name alongside the page number in the top right. Unless your professor states otherwise, this isn’t necessary according to APA conventions. Instead, you’d just type the page number so that it stands alone.
Here’s a helpful resource you can use as a visual guide to APA (and what I use to review APA formatting for student papers!): https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_guide/documents/APA%207%20Student%20Sample%20Paper.pdf. All of my comments regarding APA formatting will be based on this resource. Comment by TWILSO60: This is fine since this is a first draft, but make sure to give this a more creative title later! Typically, your title will give the reader a good idea of your paper’s contents.
Delrion Holmes
Auburn University in Montgomery Comment by TWILSO60: Department of ___, Auburn University at Montgomery
ECED 6370 Comment by TWILSO60: ECED 6370: Full Course Title Comment by TWILSO60: Place your professor’s first and last name between these pieces of information.
“Dr. Firstname Lastname
06/19/2025 Comment by TWILSO60: 19 June 2025 Comment by TWILSO60: A lot of things are in the right place on your title page, but they need some slight edits to fully meet APA conventions.
**Behavioral Addictions and Psychological Distress in Turkish Psychology Students** Comment by TWILSO60: Is this the title of your paper (that’s what this would typically be, but I’m just clarifying)? If so, why not replace the “First Draft” on your title page with this, maybe followed by “An Article Review of ___”?
Gürbüzer and Gürcan-Yıldırım (2025) examined behavioral addictions and psychological distress in a sample of 329 psychology students (76.3% female) from Eastern Turkey. With the application of validated scales (Internet Addiction Test, Yale Food Addiction Scale, etc.) along with the SCL-90-R for psychological symptomatology, the study generated major findings: Comment by TWILSO60: Could we get the authors’ full names when you first introduce them? Comment by TWILSO60: I think you might use the literary present tense instead of past: typically when one writes about an article, they describe it as though it’s unfolding in the present. It’s sometimes awkward to do, but it’s the general practice. Comment by TWILSO60: I might want a little more information into the background of this study. Why was it conducted? What did they hope to discover?
Also, the point that most participants are female is interesting, but I don’t understand its significance quite yet. Because it’s highlighted, though, I feel like it must be significant, right? Clarify this for us, just a little.
I.
**Prevalence Rates**: Comment by TWILSO60: Is the professor okay with how this is broken down into a bulleted list? Most article reviews I’ve read in the Learning Center have been typed as traditional paragraphs.
Double check the expectations with your professor because they may expect paragraphs themselves, which would include a more involved process of writing than these bulleted lists.
· Food addiction was the most common type of addiction at 21%, then Internet addiction and compulsive buying (both 10.3%).
· Exercise and gambling latencies showed lesser figures of 5.5 and 3.3%, respectively, due to cultural/geographical considerations (e.g., religious prohibitions on gambling).
II.
**Demographic Predictors**:
· Gender differences were found with compulsive buying and food addiction higher in females, whilst males were higher in exercise and gambling addictions. Income, on the other hand, was only statistically significantly associated with compulsive buying.
· A link was found between BMI and food/exercise addictions, implying that there might be two-way interactions between weight and addictive behaviors.
III.
**Psychological Distress**:
· There was a general correlation between compulsive buying, internet addiction, and food addiction and all SCL-90-R symptoms (such as depression and anxiety).
· Exercise addiction was more strongly related to phobic anxiety and psychoticism.
· Regression analysis determined the following predictors:
i. Internet addiction: Depression, phobic anxiety, and paranoid ideation.
ii. Food addiction: Phobic anxiety.
iii. Compulsive buying: Paranoid ideation.
IV.
**Theoretical Implications**: Comment by TWILSO60: It’s somewhat hard to tell what’s your writing here and what’s simply you summarizing information from the study.
The results strengthened the self-medication theory, suggesting that students might employ these addictive behaviors to relieve distress (e.g., online activity relieves depression).
V.
**Limitations**:
There is no causality due to the cross-sectional study, and bias can exist because of self-reporting. The sample makeup limits generalizing (psychology students only).
**Conclusion**: The study gave insight into culturally specific interventions addressing psychological distress to reduce behavioral addictions in students. Comment by TWILSO60: Hi Delrion,
1.)I’ve noted a few formatting / grammar mistakes in your paper. These are mostly related to the APA formatting of your title page, which could use some edits.
2.)Your draft features a well-done References page—it’s one of the best I’ve reviewed as a tutor! I think you also present some interesting findings from the article you reviewed, which is an important part of the assignment as I understand it.
3.)As you’ll see in my comments, there are a few points of primary focus for revising this draft and developing it further. For instance, your Title Page almost meets APA conventions, but there are a few mistakes holding it back. Compare your Title Page to that of the sample paper available on Purdue OWL for clarity.
More concerning, though, is the formatting of your article review. Unless your professor has asked for it to be formatted as it is, I don’t think this should be typed in the form of bulleted lists. These lists are helpful when drafting a paper (and something I’ve made use of when drafting many of my own!), but they’re not usually wanted for submitted assignments because they take up a lot of space without the same depth of content as traditional paragraphs and sentences. Consider reformatting your lists so that they read as paragraphs; as you do, consider how to make your sentences cohesive, or make sure they flow well into each other.
Finally, consider what may be missing from your article review beyond traditional paragraphs: right now, your bulleted lists comprise the results or findings of the source, but it doesn’t quite go into its methods; likewise, you offer a summary of the source, but I believe most article reviews also review a source’s strengths/weaknesses as well as evaluate its overall argument and methodology. As I’m unfamiliar with this course assignment, I’m unsure what all it should include; however, it may be that there are key aspects of this article review that aren’t quite present (i.e., the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections). If you’re unsure what all you should include in your article review, please contact your professor for help and guidance.
4.)Of the changes I recommend and remind you of, I encourage you most to develop this assignment further so that it meets all expectations of an article review. As is, I’m concerned the assignment is incomplete. This may be fine for a draft, where not everything has to quite be in order, but you’ll want to make sure you fill the gaps of what may be missing. As you reformat your bulleted lists as paragraphs, you’ll naturally work toward completing the summary of your article; that’ll still leave the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections of your article review. For guidance, consider revisiting the LC, contacting your professor, or reading examples of article reviews.
**References**
Gürbüzer, N., & Gürcan-Yıldırım, D. (2025). Behavioral addictions and psychological distress: Insights from psychology students in Eastern Turkey.
_Humanities and Social Sciences Communications_,
_12_(1). https://doi.org/10.1057/s41599-025-04623-3 Comment by TWILSO60: This citation looks really nice. Just one small thing: does this source have page numbers? If so, you need to include them after the volume and issue numbers
“12(1), 431-44. http…”
**## Finaldraft.docx**
**Article Review on Behavioral/Non-Substance Addictions or Process Addictions–Final Article**
**All Students:** Be sure to use a peer-reviewed article.
Look at the list under the "Assignments" tab for a list of some professional journals or ask one of the librarians to assist you in finding peer-reviewed sources.
Your article review should be written in minimal APA style (see item 2 of your syllabus on page 2) I don't require in-text citations for this but will need the article referenced in APA style at the end.
The review must contain at least:
1. a summary of each of the articles,
2. each articles strengths and weaknesses,
3. and a conclusion indicating what insights that you gained from both articles and their benefit to students studying this topic.
Undergraduate Students:
Article Review on Process Addiction – Students will review a professional article (no webpages* or magazine articles) on a process addition. A process addiction is also called a non-substance-related addiction or behavioral addiction and it includes a compulsion to repeatedly engage in an action until it causes serious negative consequences to the person's physical, mental, social, and/or financial well-being. One sign that a behavior has become addictive is if it persists despite these consequences. Examples include but are not limited to:
gambling, sex, shopping, internet, overeating, body modification (tattoos, piercings, etc), videogames, and others
*Note: internet sources that are based upon professional print sources are acceptable for the review. Non-professional and unverified websites are not acceptable. The paper must be at least a full page long (not including cover) and provide the reference for the article, double-spaced, New Times Roman 12-pt font, and APA format (see item #2 above). (All Objectives)
Journals (Your paper should come from peer reviewed Journals such as the ones below, these are only suggestions bur remember that magazines and other non-peer reviewed sources are not accepted.)
LIST OF SUBSTANCE ABUSE JOURNALS*
Addiction. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addictive Biology. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addiction Professional. Providence, RI: Manisses Communication Group.
Addictive Behavior. New York: Pergamon Press.
Addictive Disorders and Their Treatments. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Advances in Alcohol and Substance Abuse. New York: Haworth.
Alcohol. New York: Pergamon Press.
Alcohol and Alcoholism [Official Journal of Medical Council on Alcoholism]. London: Oxford University Press.
Alcohol Health & Research World. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcohol Research and Health. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcoholism: Clinical and Experimental Research [Official Journal of the Research Society on Alcoholism]. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Alcoholism Treatment Quarterly. New York: Haworth.
American Journal on Addiction [Official Journal of American Academy of Addiction Psychiatry]. New York: Brunner-Routledge.
American Journal of Drug and Alcohol Abuse. New York: Taylor & Francis. [refereed]
British Journal of Addiction. Oxford, England: Blackwell Publishing.
Contemporary Drug Problems. NY: Federal Legal Publications. [refereed]
Drug and Alcohol Dependence. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Drug and Alcohol Review. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Drugs, Education, Prevention, and Policy. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Journal of Addictions and Offender Counseling. Alexandria, VA: American Counseling Association. [refereed]
Journal of Addictive Diseases [Official Journal of American Society on Addiction Medicine]. New York: Haworth.
Journal of Alcohol and Drug Education. Lansing, MI: American Alcohol & Drug
Information Foundation. [refereed]
Journal of Chemical Dependency Treatment. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Child and Adolescent Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Drug Education. Amityville, NY: Baywood Publishing.
Journal of Drug Issues. Tallahassee, FL: School of Criminology and Criminal Justice.
Journal of Ethnicity and Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Prevention and Intervention in the Community. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Primary Prevention. New York: Plenum.
Journal of Psychoactive Drugs. San Francisco: Haight-Ashbury.
Journal of Studies on Alcohol. Picataway, NJ: Alcohol Research Documentation.
[refereed]
Journal of Substance Abuse. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Journal of Substance Abuse Treatment. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Nicotine and Tobacco Research [Official Journal of the Society for Research on Nicotine and Tobacco]. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Psychology of Addictive Behaviors. Washington, DC: American Psychological
Association.
Substance Abuse. New York: Plenum.
Substance Use and Misuse. New York: Dekker.
\* This is not a comprehensive list.
**## DraftwTutorComments11.docx**
Holmes 4
**First** **Draft** Comment by TWILSO60: I notice you type your last name alongside the page number in the top right. Unless your professor states otherwise, this isn’t necessary according to APA conventions. Instead, you’d just type the page number so that it stands alone.
Here’s a helpful resource you can use as a visual guide to APA (and what I use to review APA formatting for student papers!): https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_guide/documents/APA%207%20Student%20Sample%20Paper.pdf. All of my comments regarding APA formatting will be based on this resource. Comment by TWILSO60: This is fine since this is a first draft, but make sure to give this a more creative title later! Typically, your title will give the reader a good idea of your paper’s contents.
Delrion Holmes
Auburn University in Montgomery Comment by TWILSO60: Department of ___, Auburn University at Montgomery
ECED 6370 Comment by TWILSO60: ECED 6370: Full Course Title Comment by TWILSO60: Place your professor’s first and last name between these pieces of information.
“Dr. Firstname Lastname
06/19/2025 Comment by TWILSO60: 19 June 2025 Comment by TWILSO60: A lot of things are in the right place on your title page, but they need some slight edits to fully meet APA conventions.
**Behavioral Addictions and Psychological Distress in Turkish Psychology Students** Comment by TWILSO60: Is this the title of your paper (that’s what this would typically be, but I’m just clarifying)? If so, why not replace the “First Draft” on your title page with this, maybe followed by “An Article Review of ___”?
Gürbüzer and Gürcan-Yıldırım (2025) examined behavioral addictions and psychological distress in a sample of 329 psychology students (76.3% female) from Eastern Turkey. With the application of validated scales (Internet Addiction Test, Yale Food Addiction Scale, etc.) along with the SCL-90-R for psychological symptomatology, the study generated major findings: Comment by TWILSO60: Could we get the authors’ full names when you first introduce them? Comment by TWILSO60: I think you might use the literary present tense instead of past: typically when one writes about an article, they describe it as though it’s unfolding in the present. It’s sometimes awkward to do, but it’s the general practice. Comment by TWILSO60: I might want a little more information into the background of this study. Why was it conducted? What did they hope to discover?
Also, the point that most participants are female is interesting, but I don’t understand its significance quite yet. Because it’s highlighted, though, I feel like it must be significant, right? Clarify this for us, just a little.
I.
**Prevalence Rates**: Comment by TWILSO60: Is the professor okay with how this is broken down into a bulleted list? Most article reviews I’ve read in the Learning Center have been typed as traditional paragraphs.
Double check the expectations with your professor because they may expect paragraphs themselves, which would include a more involved process of writing than these bulleted lists.
· Food addiction was the most common type of addiction at 21%, then Internet addiction and compulsive buying (both 10.3%).
· Exercise and gambling latencies showed lesser figures of 5.5 and 3.3%, respectively, due to cultural/geographical considerations (e.g., religious prohibitions on gambling).
II.
**Demographic Predictors**:
· Gender differences were found with compulsive buying and food addiction higher in females, whilst males were higher in exercise and gambling addictions. Income, on the other hand, was only statistically significantly associated with compulsive buying.
· A link was found between BMI and food/exercise addictions, implying that there might be two-way interactions between weight and addictive behaviors.
III.
**Psychological Distress**:
· There was a general correlation between compulsive buying, internet addiction, and food addiction and all SCL-90-R symptoms (such as depression and anxiety).
· Exercise addiction was more strongly related to phobic anxiety and psychoticism.
· Regression analysis determined the following predictors:
i. Internet addiction: Depression, phobic anxiety, and paranoid ideation.
ii. Food addiction: Phobic anxiety.
iii. Compulsive buying: Paranoid ideation.
IV.
**Theoretical Implications**: Comment by TWILSO60: It’s somewhat hard to tell what’s your writing here and what’s simply you summarizing information from the study.
The results strengthened the self-medication theory, suggesting that students might employ these addictive behaviors to relieve distress (e.g., online activity relieves depression).
V.
**Limitations**:
There is no causality due to the cross-sectional study, and bias can exist because of self-reporting. The sample makeup limits generalizing (psychology students only).
**Conclusion**: The study gave insight into culturally specific interventions addressing psychological distress to reduce behavioral addictions in students. Comment by TWILSO60: Hi Delrion,
1.)I’ve noted a few formatting / grammar mistakes in your paper. These are mostly related to the APA formatting of your title page, which could use some edits.
2.)Your draft features a well-done References page—it’s one of the best I’ve reviewed as a tutor! I think you also present some interesting findings from the article you reviewed, which is an important part of the assignment as I understand it.
3.)As you’ll see in my comments, there are a few points of primary focus for revising this draft and developing it further. For instance, your Title Page almost meets APA conventions, but there are a few mistakes holding it back. Compare your Title Page to that of the sample paper available on Purdue OWL for clarity.
More concerning, though, is the formatting of your article review. Unless your professor has asked for it to be formatted as it is, I don’t think this should be typed in the form of bulleted lists. These lists are helpful when drafting a paper (and something I’ve made use of when drafting many of my own!), but they’re not usually wanted for submitted assignments because they take up a lot of space without the same depth of content as traditional paragraphs and sentences. Consider reformatting your lists so that they read as paragraphs; as you do, consider how to make your sentences cohesive, or make sure they flow well into each other.
Finally, consider what may be missing from your article review beyond traditional paragraphs: right now, your bulleted lists comprise the results or findings of the source, but it doesn’t quite go into its methods; likewise, you offer a summary of the source, but I believe most article reviews also review a source’s strengths/weaknesses as well as evaluate its overall argument and methodology. As I’m unfamiliar with this course assignment, I’m unsure what all it should include; however, it may be that there are key aspects of this article review that aren’t quite present (i.e., the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections). If you’re unsure what all you should include in your article review, please contact your professor for help and guidance.
4.)Of the changes I recommend and remind you of, I encourage you most to develop this assignment further so that it meets all expectations of an article review. As is, I’m concerned the assignment is incomplete. This may be fine for a draft, where not everything has to quite be in order, but you’ll want to make sure you fill the gaps of what may be missing. As you reformat your bulleted lists as paragraphs, you’ll naturally work toward completing the summary of your article; that’ll still leave the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections of your article review. For guidance, consider revisiting the LC, contacting your professor, or reading examples of article reviews.
**References**
Gürbüzer, N., & Gürcan-Yıldırım, D. (2025). Behavioral addictions and psychological distress: Insights from psychology students in Eastern Turkey.
_Humanities and Social Sciences Communications_,
_12_(1). https://doi.org/10.1057/s41599-025-04623-3 Comment by TWILSO60: This citation looks really nice. Just one small thing: does this source have page numbers? If so, you need to include them after the volume and issue numbers
“12(1), 431-44. http…”
**## Finaldraft.docx**
**Article Review on Behavioral/Non-Substance Addictions or Process Addictions–Final Article**
**All Students:** Be sure to use a peer-reviewed article.
Look at the list under the "Assignments" tab for a list of some professional journals or ask one of the librarians to assist you in finding peer-reviewed sources.
Your article review should be written in minimal APA style (see item 2 of your syllabus on page 2) I don't require in-text citations for this but will need the article referenced in APA style at the end.
The review must contain at least:
1. a summary of each of the articles,
2. each articles strengths and weaknesses,
3. and a conclusion indicating what insights that you gained from both articles and their benefit to students studying this topic.
Undergraduate Students:
Article Review on Process Addiction – Students will review a professional article (no webpages* or magazine articles) on a process addition. A process addiction is also called a non-substance-related addiction or behavioral addiction and it includes a compulsion to repeatedly engage in an action until it causes serious negative consequences to the person's physical, mental, social, and/or financial well-being. One sign that a behavior has become addictive is if it persists despite these consequences. Examples include but are not limited to:
gambling, sex, shopping, internet, overeating, body modification (tattoos, piercings, etc), videogames, and others
*Note: internet sources that are based upon professional print sources are acceptable for the review. Non-professional and unverified websites are not acceptable. The paper must be at least a full page long (not including cover) and provide the reference for the article, double-spaced, New Times Roman 12-pt font, and APA format (see item #2 above). (All Objectives)
Journals (Your paper should come from peer reviewed Journals such as the ones below, these are only suggestions bur remember that magazines and other non-peer reviewed sources are not accepted.)
LIST OF SUBSTANCE ABUSE JOURNALS*
Addiction. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addictive Biology. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Addiction Professional. Providence, RI: Manisses Communication Group.
Addictive Behavior. New York: Pergamon Press.
Addictive Disorders and Their Treatments. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Advances in Alcohol and Substance Abuse. New York: Haworth.
Alcohol. New York: Pergamon Press.
Alcohol and Alcoholism [Official Journal of Medical Council on Alcoholism]. London: Oxford University Press.
Alcohol Health & Research World. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcohol Research and Health. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. [refereed]
Alcoholism: Clinical and Experimental Research [Official Journal of the Research Society on Alcoholism]. Baltimore, MD: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.
Alcoholism Treatment Quarterly. New York: Haworth.
American Journal on Addiction [Official Journal of American Academy of Addiction Psychiatry]. New York: Brunner-Routledge.
American Journal of Drug and Alcohol Abuse. New York: Taylor & Francis. [refereed]
British Journal of Addiction. Oxford, England: Blackwell Publishing.
Contemporary Drug Problems. NY: Federal Legal Publications. [refereed]
Drug and Alcohol Dependence. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Drug and Alcohol Review. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Drugs, Education, Prevention, and Policy. New York: Taylor & Francis.
Journal of Addictions and Offender Counseling. Alexandria, VA: American Counseling Association. [refereed]
Journal of Addictive Diseases [Official Journal of American Society on Addiction Medicine]. New York: Haworth.
Journal of Alcohol and Drug Education. Lansing, MI: American Alcohol & Drug
Information Foundation. [refereed]
Journal of Chemical Dependency Treatment. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Child and Adolescent Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Drug Education. Amityville, NY: Baywood Publishing.
Journal of Drug Issues. Tallahassee, FL: School of Criminology and Criminal Justice.
Journal of Ethnicity and Substance Abuse. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Prevention and Intervention in the Community. Binghamton, New York: Haworth.
Journal of Primary Prevention. New York: Plenum.
Journal of Psychoactive Drugs. San Francisco: Haight-Ashbury.
Journal of Studies on Alcohol. Picataway, NJ: Alcohol Research Documentation.
[refereed]
Journal of Substance Abuse. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Journal of Substance Abuse Treatment. Philadelphia: Elsevier.
Nicotine and Tobacco Research [Official Journal of the Society for Research on Nicotine and Tobacco]. New York: Carfax Publishing.
Psychology of Addictive Behaviors. Washington, DC: American Psychological
Association.
Substance Abuse. New York: Plenum.
Substance Use and Misuse. New York: Dekker.
\* This is not a comprehensive list.
**## DraftwTutorComments11.docx**
Holmes 4
**First** **Draft** Comment by TWILSO60: I notice you type your last name alongside the page number in the top right. Unless your professor states otherwise, this isn’t necessary according to APA conventions. Instead, you’d just type the page number so that it stands alone.
Here’s a helpful resource you can use as a visual guide to APA (and what I use to review APA formatting for student papers!): https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_guide/documents/APA%207%20Student%20Sample%20Paper.pdf. All of my comments regarding APA formatting will be based on this resource. Comment by TWILSO60: This is fine since this is a first draft, but make sure to give this a more creative title later! Typically, your title will give the reader a good idea of your paper’s contents.
Delrion Holmes
Auburn University in Montgomery Comment by TWILSO60: Department of ___, Auburn University at Montgomery
ECED 6370 Comment by TWILSO60: ECED 6370: Full Course Title Comment by TWILSO60: Place your professor’s first and last name between these pieces of information.
“Dr. Firstname Lastname
06/19/2025 Comment by TWILSO60: 19 June 2025 Comment by TWILSO60: A lot of things are in the right place on your title page, but they need some slight edits to fully meet APA conventions.
**Behavioral Addictions and Psychological Distress in Turkish Psychology Students** Comment by TWILSO60: Is this the title of your paper (that’s what this would typically be, but I’m just clarifying)? If so, why not replace the “First Draft” on your title page with this, maybe followed by “An Article Review of ___”?
Gürbüzer and Gürcan-Yıldırım (2025) examined behavioral addictions and psychological distress in a sample of 329 psychology students (76.3% female) from Eastern Turkey. With the application of validated scales (Internet Addiction Test, Yale Food Addiction Scale, etc.) along with the SCL-90-R for psychological symptomatology, the study generated major findings: Comment by TWILSO60: Could we get the authors’ full names when you first introduce them? Comment by TWILSO60: I think you might use the literary present tense instead of past: typically when one writes about an article, they describe it as though it’s unfolding in the present. It’s sometimes awkward to do, but it’s the general practice. Comment by TWILSO60: I might want a little more information into the background of this study. Why was it conducted? What did they hope to discover?
Also, the point that most participants are female is interesting, but I don’t understand its significance quite yet. Because it’s highlighted, though, I feel like it must be significant, right? Clarify this for us, just a little.
I.
**Prevalence Rates**: Comment by TWILSO60: Is the professor okay with how this is broken down into a bulleted list? Most article reviews I’ve read in the Learning Center have been typed as traditional paragraphs.
Double check the expectations with your professor because they may expect paragraphs themselves, which would include a more involved process of writing than these bulleted lists.
· Food addiction was the most common type of addiction at 21%, then Internet addiction and compulsive buying (both 10.3%).
· Exercise and gambling latencies showed lesser figures of 5.5 and 3.3%, respectively, due to cultural/geographical considerations (e.g., religious prohibitions on gambling).
II.
**Demographic Predictors**:
· Gender differences were found with compulsive buying and food addiction higher in females, whilst males were higher in exercise and gambling addictions. Income, on the other hand, was only statistically significantly associated with compulsive buying.
· A link was found between BMI and food/exercise addictions, implying that there might be two-way interactions between weight and addictive behaviors.
III.
**Psychological Distress**:
· There was a general correlation between compulsive buying, internet addiction, and food addiction and all SCL-90-R symptoms (such as depression and anxiety).
· Exercise addiction was more strongly related to phobic anxiety and psychoticism.
· Regression analysis determined the following predictors:
i. Internet addiction: Depression, phobic anxiety, and paranoid ideation.
ii. Food addiction: Phobic anxiety.
iii. Compulsive buying: Paranoid ideation.
IV.
**Theoretical Implications**: Comment by TWILSO60: It’s somewhat hard to tell what’s your writing here and what’s simply you summarizing information from the study.
The results strengthened the self-medication theory, suggesting that students might employ these addictive behaviors to relieve distress (e.g., online activity relieves depression).
V.
**Limitations**:
There is no causality due to the cross-sectional study, and bias can exist because of self-reporting. The sample makeup limits generalizing (psychology students only).
**Conclusion**: The study gave insight into culturally specific interventions addressing psychological distress to reduce behavioral addictions in students. Comment by TWILSO60: Hi Delrion,
1.)I’ve noted a few formatting / grammar mistakes in your paper. These are mostly related to the APA formatting of your title page, which could use some edits.
2.)Your draft features a well-done References page—it’s one of the best I’ve reviewed as a tutor! I think you also present some interesting findings from the article you reviewed, which is an important part of the assignment as I understand it.
3.)As you’ll see in my comments, there are a few points of primary focus for revising this draft and developing it further. For instance, your Title Page almost meets APA conventions, but there are a few mistakes holding it back. Compare your Title Page to that of the sample paper available on Purdue OWL for clarity.
More concerning, though, is the formatting of your article review. Unless your professor has asked for it to be formatted as it is, I don’t think this should be typed in the form of bulleted lists. These lists are helpful when drafting a paper (and something I’ve made use of when drafting many of my own!), but they’re not usually wanted for submitted assignments because they take up a lot of space without the same depth of content as traditional paragraphs and sentences. Consider reformatting your lists so that they read as paragraphs; as you do, consider how to make your sentences cohesive, or make sure they flow well into each other.
Finally, consider what may be missing from your article review beyond traditional paragraphs: right now, your bulleted lists comprise the results or findings of the source, but it doesn’t quite go into its methods; likewise, you offer a summary of the source, but I believe most article reviews also review a source’s strengths/weaknesses as well as evaluate its overall argument and methodology. As I’m unfamiliar with this course assignment, I’m unsure what all it should include; however, it may be that there are key aspects of this article review that aren’t quite present (i.e., the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections). If you’re unsure what all you should include in your article review, please contact your professor for help and guidance.
4.)Of the changes I recommend and remind you of, I encourage you most to develop this assignment further so that it meets all expectations of an article review. As is, I’m concerned the assignment is incomplete. This may be fine for a draft, where not everything has to quite be in order, but you’ll want to make sure you fill the gaps of what may be missing. As you reformat your bulleted lists as paragraphs, you’ll naturally work toward completing the summary of your article; that’ll still leave the strengths/weaknesses and evaluation sections of your article review. For guidance, consider revisiting the LC, contacting your professor, or reading examples of article reviews.
**References**
Gürbüzer, N., & Gürcan-Yıldırım, D. (2025). Behavioral addictions and psychological distress: Insights from psychology students in Eastern Turkey.
_Humanities and Social Sciences Communications_,
_12_(1). https://doi.org/10.1057/s41599-025-04623-3 Comment by TWILSO60: This citation looks really nice. Just one small thing: does this source have page numbers? If so, you need to include them after the volume and issue numbers
“12(1), 431-44. http…”
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